Really superb story, with lots of themes I’m a fan off!
The actual dialogue could do with an update though, some fairly easy fixes and a few rewrites to make it sound more natural to an English speaker. I’m happy to help with any of that if you would like.
thank you for your approval of our work. as non-native English speakers, we knew the dialog we have written may look wired to those who born speaking English, the reason we are doing it ourselves is because since the story of our comics getting more and more complicated, the greater chance for the third party dialog writer misunderstood the concept of the story due to lack of communication and language barrier. we write dialog by ourselves now, we hired a native English speaker who used to teach English in school to correct the line, but the problem is that person has no interesting on BDSM comics at all. that alone made our dialog lacking the vibe of sexiness BDSM theme. our goal is to make top-notch BDSM comics, in order to get there, we will need your suggestions and feedbacks. you can email to kittyhandstudio@gmail.com to help us improve our works.